Decent
I've said it before and I'll say it again, you have a good voice for storytelling. Would be great for e-books or the radio. There are a few really noticeable pauses in the recording that somewhat interrupt the flow of the story. Not badly, but they are there. It's mostly obvious by the static from the mic. I guess that leaves it up to you if you feel like investing in a high quality mic to record clips and send them to Newgrounds.
The story is meh. You nailed the voice acting pretty well but the repeating lines in this story just seemed kinda cheesy, mostly because the line wasn't really all that epic enough to be repeated, in my opinion. The clip is only about two and a half minutes and I'm sure there's a lot more that you could have read from the story. Maybe a 10 minute story with some sort of buildup and a climax would be nice to hear.
Overall a good piece. I think you can do better if you really want to, but nonetheless the piece is still enjoyable.
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