Sick
LOL wow that was sick. Okay, where to begin, lol. The beat throughout the entire song was sick and matched perfectly, I really don't have much criticism for that. I'm glad you added the lyrics to us to read along. Most of those are hilarious and well thought out. The effects on the vocals are also great and interesting.
I'm giving you a 10, but I think there's a couple things you can do to touch this up. Not sure if you're actually going to, but I'll tell you anyway. The main verse, the huge one, I think could use a little bit of work. I know it would be a total pain in the ass to have to rap the whole thing over again and remix the song to match it, so I'm not expecting you to even bother, but in the future I have a tip. 90% of the main verse was sick, but a couple parts did come off a tad cheesy. Not bad, just a little bit cheesy.
I think if you added some pauses in the vocals and maybe a break in the beat it would be WAY sick. I hope you know what I mean when I say that. Like midway through the main verse just stop with the vocals and let the beat carry out for a couple measures you know? Just to let the last word soak in a bit. I hope that makes sense.
Anway, yeah all the other vocals are sick, and the effects are great. I'm giving you a 10 for humor, effort, and a sick beat. I think I should give you a 9 really because I found a couple things I would change, but based on the pure effort I'll give you a 10 to motivate you to keep going because I can see a lot of potential here. It has a real ICP/gangster feel to it and it just sounds sick. Keep up the good work guys, and hopefully you understand what I was getting at.