Hmm
Well to be honest I just don't like it at all. Even if the effort was behind this I'd just abandon it where it stands. The vocals don't sound good to me at all, and at multiple points the song sound out of beat. Not only that but the song sounds like it needs some serious EQing at certain parts. It might just be me but it doesn't sound mixed right at all.
That might not be what you wanted to hear, but that's what I'm hearing. The screams were really good, and probably about the only part of the song that I enjoyed. The guitar and drums were decent, but with the electronic noises also playing it just seemed like too much. Maybe could be fixed with mixing, I don't really know to be honest.
There were a few parts of the song that I enjoyed, but overall I'd say the parts that didn't sound good to me outweighed them a lot in this song.
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